This might be the greatest idea ever. I can give you all the reasons why it’s so good, but you have got them all figured out. My definate props for that!
I have a tip though. If you are interested, continue reading.
I like your story but I don’t LOVE it. It’s because it’s written in an inpersonal style. In order to promote it more effectively, I’d like you to give a personalised WHY?
I.E: I was hiding from my friends for two years. I was failing in my study of philosophy and I didn’t wanted to come out. I had a severe case of depression. I had everything I needed: A house, food, even a hot shower, and still I despaired. Life was way out of whack, something was deeply wrong!
Then, I remember the moment clearly: I was in the kitchen and I was going to stuff myself with yet another sandwich, when by chance a shadow of a man walked by, obviously a beggar. I looked at my extra bacon and egg sandwich, and something just clicked in my brain. I hurried outside and caught him on the street corner. I gave it to him, he murmbled something weird, but the look he gave me was etched into my soul.
That day I felt elated. I went out and started to do random acts of kindness. I bought flowers and gave it to an old lady and an anorexic girl. I joined a couple of young people to give free hugs. I donated all my pocket money to beggars. I even withdrew money to give more.
I was stunned: Living truly is giving! The depression lifted and I never looked back. I was able to finish my master in philosophy, and made more friends than i ever had. Since then I have been trying to help as much as I can. And as smart as I can!
~ I am sure you can write a terrific personal story. Continue what you are doing, and make it count!
This might be the greatest idea ever. I can give you all the reasons why it’s so good, but you have got them all figured out. My definate props for that!
I have a tip though. If you are interested, continue reading.
I like your story but I don’t LOVE it. It’s because it’s written in an inpersonal style. In order to promote it more effectively, I’d like you to give a personalised WHY?
I.E: I was hiding from my friends for two years. I was failing in my study of philosophy and I didn’t wanted to come out. I had a severe case of depression. I had everything I needed: A house, food, even a hot shower, and still I despaired. Life was way out of whack, something was deeply wrong!
Then, I remember the moment clearly: I was in the kitchen and I was going to stuff myself with yet another sandwich, when by chance a shadow of a man walked by, obviously a beggar. I looked at my extra bacon and egg sandwich, and something just clicked in my brain. I hurried outside and caught him on the street corner. I gave it to him, he murmbled something weird, but the look he gave me was etched into my soul.
That day I felt elated. I went out and started to do random acts of kindness. I bought flowers and gave it to an old lady and an anorexic girl. I joined a couple of young people to give free hugs. I donated all my pocket money to beggars. I even withdrew money to give more.
I was stunned: Living truly is giving! The depression lifted and I never looked back. I was able to finish my master in philosophy, and made more friends than i ever had. Since then I have been trying to help as much as I can. And as smart as I can!
~ I am sure you can write a terrific personal story. Continue what you are doing, and make it count!