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• jz 3 Nov 2021 17:18 UTC

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  in reply to: Noumero’s comment on: [Creative Writ­ing Con­test] Birth­day Par­ties and Actuaries

  Thanks for the detailed feedback! I found it very helpful and not nitpicky at all.

  I struggled with finding a balance between explaining everything and letting the readers figure things out. My biggest worry was that it would be incomprehensible without the long exposition, but based on your response I should have run this by more test readers.

  Regarding the ending, I definitely felt the speech and aftermath was the weakest part of the story, and I like how your suggestions would add tension and stakes like you said. When I have time, I’ll see how I can make those work and edit them in.

• jz 1 Nov 2021 6:12 UTC

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  on: [Creative Writ­ing Con­test] Birth­day Par­ties and Actuaries

  Hope you enjoyed reading! Any feedback would be appreciated. I will literally Venmo you $5 for it (PM me).

  Also, I submitted this the night of the deadline, but it wasn’t moderator-approved until the morning after. Sorry for procrastinating