Got it. I would recommend cutting this post down roughly in half—you take a while to get to the point (stating your thesis in roughly the 14th paragraph). I understand the desire to try and warn the audience for what is coming, but the first section until you get to the thesis just seems overwrought to me. I know cutting is hard, but I’m confident the rewards from increased clarity will be worth it.
Got it. I would recommend cutting this post down roughly in half—you take a while to get to the point (stating your thesis in roughly the 14th paragraph). I understand the desire to try and warn the audience for what is coming, but the first section until you get to the thesis just seems overwrought to me. I know cutting is hard, but I’m confident the rewards from increased clarity will be worth it.
I’ve added a summary. Thanks, this was the first time I wrote a post on this forum.
I liked the long introductory exposition, though I also agree with adding the summary.