Nice one!
The ending paragraph seems strange though: Simon just argued that the universe is at stake and that the MC is wrong, and then hands over the decision?
I suppose that you want to put the reader in the shoes of the MC, but I don’t think that this is a good way to do that.
Nice one!
The ending paragraph seems strange though: Simon just argued that the universe is at stake and that the MC is wrong, and then hands over the decision?
I suppose that you want to put the reader in the shoes of the MC, but I don’t think that this is a good way to do that.