Thanks for posting and competing! I’m excited to see creative writing on the Forum. I enjoyed the setting of the lake, the kindness and camaraderie between neighbors, and watching the young person grow enthusiasm for a project.
I think it’s fine (maybe good) to explore activities in fiction that I wouldn’t do in real life or would find cruel in real life. So while I don’t fish anymore because I find it cruel, I think it’s fully possible to learn lessons from fiction about things I would find disturbing in real life. So I disagree with the other comment , and would still read a tale about fishing, if it taught me something.
I didn’t see much emphasis in the story on evidence and reasoning, so that part didn’t come through clearly for me.
Hope you keep editing this one, or writing other stories as you create worlds around ideas you care about!
Dear anonymous person—thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts! I really appreciate your encouragements—it is thrilling for a newbie writer to see what images it brought to mind for you. And thank you for providing an alternative opinion to Peterslattery’s comment.
I will see whether or not I will try to edit this story to more clearly convey the “evidence-and-reasoning” part, or if I will just have a shot at a new one...!
Thanks for posting and competing! I’m excited to see creative writing on the Forum. I enjoyed the setting of the lake, the kindness and camaraderie between neighbors, and watching the young person grow enthusiasm for a project.
I think it’s fine (maybe good) to explore activities in fiction that I wouldn’t do in real life or would find cruel in real life. So while I don’t fish anymore because I find it cruel, I think it’s fully possible to learn lessons from fiction about things I would find disturbing in real life. So I disagree with the other comment , and would still read a tale about fishing, if it taught me something.
I didn’t see much emphasis in the story on evidence and reasoning, so that part didn’t come through clearly for me.
Hope you keep editing this one, or writing other stories as you create worlds around ideas you care about!
Dear anonymous person—thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts! I really appreciate your encouragements—it is thrilling for a newbie writer to see what images it brought to mind for you. And thank you for providing an alternative opinion to Peterslattery’s comment.
I will see whether or not I will try to edit this story to more clearly convey the “evidence-and-reasoning” part, or if I will just have a shot at a new one...!