I like the structure and style of this piece, and think it makes sense for this central resource to be more formal and less emotional, and leave the more anecdote-y articles to media pieces which will have a wider audience anyway.
I think “greater significance to the industrial revolution” should be “greater significance than the industrial revolution”
Thanks Oscar! I’ve updated the sentence in the essay now to read: “The result would be an enormous transformation, perhaps of a significance similar to or greater than the industrial revolution in the 1800s.”
I like the structure and style of this piece, and think it makes sense for this central resource to be more formal and less emotional, and leave the more anecdote-y articles to media pieces which will have a wider audience anyway.
I think “greater significance to the industrial revolution” should be “greater significance than the industrial revolution”
Thanks Oscar! I’ve updated the sentence in the essay now to read: “The result would be an enormous transformation, perhaps of a significance similar to or greater than the industrial revolution in the 1800s.”