I quite like the current slightly slow and ponderous language. It gives a feeling of seriousness to it, which I think is appropriate given how large the commitment is.
There may well still be changes to the language I’d support, but I’m not sure without specific suggestions. I think “ten percent” is a bit better than “10%”, and “now and in years to come” is quite a lot better than “hereafter”.
I quite like the current slightly slow and ponderous language. It gives a feeling of seriousness to it, which I think is appropriate given how large the commitment is.
There may well still be changes to the language I’d support, but I’m not sure without specific suggestions. I think “ten percent” is a bit better than “10%”, and “now and in years to come” is quite a lot better than “hereafter”.
‘Henceforth’ is another possibility. Swaps bureaucratic for pompous, maybe.