Here are some of the attributes of this post that I think are great:
You discuss concrete actions that can/have been taken to do good
You have actually done some of them.
Here are some aspects that can be improved:
Since the post is over about a thousand words, you could include a summary of the post at the beginning
I think that you would land closer to the mark by simply requesting ways to improve the post, rather than suggesting an obligation that’s connected to their voting habits, which people might resent (and therefore downvote, as harsh as that may be).
Your previous posts have been percieved as excessively self-promotional. Implicit in this criticism is that you haven’t yet convinced others of the value of your project. Your project is new, and seems to be closely tied to the EA community, so perhaps more work needs to be done in eliciting and addressing others’ reservations, so that others can either join you or else you can adjust your project. This could be done by soliciting questions, and characterising your disagreements prior to writing essays of persuasion.
Hopefully you will get plenty more criticism from others that is in a similarly constructive spirit.
Ryan, thank you, these are really helpful suggestions! Much appreciated :-)
I have edited the post to account for all three of your points:
1) Added a summary at the top
2) Removed the sentence clause about voting habits
3) Solicited questions about reservations, and highlighted that we are committed to moving forward in a collaborative truth-seeking manner about what would optimize human flourishing.
Here are some of the attributes of this post that I think are great:
You discuss concrete actions that can/have been taken to do good
You have actually done some of them.
Here are some aspects that can be improved:
Since the post is over about a thousand words, you could include a summary of the post at the beginning
I think that you would land closer to the mark by simply requesting ways to improve the post, rather than suggesting an obligation that’s connected to their voting habits, which people might resent (and therefore downvote, as harsh as that may be).
Your previous posts have been percieved as excessively self-promotional. Implicit in this criticism is that you haven’t yet convinced others of the value of your project. Your project is new, and seems to be closely tied to the EA community, so perhaps more work needs to be done in eliciting and addressing others’ reservations, so that others can either join you or else you can adjust your project. This could be done by soliciting questions, and characterising your disagreements prior to writing essays of persuasion.
Hopefully you will get plenty more criticism from others that is in a similarly constructive spirit.
Ryan, thank you, these are really helpful suggestions! Much appreciated :-)
I have edited the post to account for all three of your points:
1) Added a summary at the top 2) Removed the sentence clause about voting habits 3) Solicited questions about reservations, and highlighted that we are committed to moving forward in a collaborative truth-seeking manner about what would optimize human flourishing.
Thanks again!