Not a big thing, but I would be a bit careful with comments like this, could maybe be considered a tiny bit stereotyping or patronising—especially if you are going for a wider public audience.
“Maybe playing with other kids in their village. Maybe seeking shade with his or her siblings, trying to escape the sub-Saharan African heat. Maybe being held by their mother or grandmother, nurtured.”
Perhaps even a slight change to something like.
”Maybe they were playing with their friends at school. Maybe studying towards their dream of becoming a doctor. Maybe lounging on their grandma’s lap, soaking up her love and wisdom.”
Or it might be completely fine, feel free to ignore.
Nice one again, love the simplicity and bluntness.
Love this—strong upvote.
Not a big thing, but I would be a bit careful with comments like this, could maybe be considered a tiny bit stereotyping or patronising—especially if you are going for a wider public audience.
“Maybe playing with other kids in their village. Maybe seeking shade with his or her siblings, trying to escape the sub-Saharan African heat. Maybe being held by their mother or grandmother, nurtured.”
Perhaps even a slight change to something like.
”Maybe they were playing with their friends at school. Maybe studying towards their dream of becoming a doctor. Maybe lounging on their grandma’s lap, soaking up her love and wisdom.”
Or it might be completely fine, feel free to ignore.
Nice one again, love the simplicity and bluntness.
Thanks Nick! Really appreciate you flagging this. I didn’t intend it that way and hope the edit helps:
Nice one yeah that’s great—if it was me I would perhaps even change kicking rocks to kicking a football ;).