Could you put a disclaimer at the top rather than the bottom? When reading it I over updated my model of “what Kerry thinks”, then corrected all at once at the end. Sometimes surprise is useful rhetorically, but I don’t think that’s what’s going on here. :)
Could you put a disclaimer at the top rather than the bottom? When reading it I over updated my model of “what Kerry thinks”, then corrected all at once at the end. Sometimes surprise is useful rhetorically, but I don’t think that’s what’s going on here. :)
Sure, I can do that—I moved the Edit up after the first paragraph, immediately after talking about the phone call.