Dear Greg—thank you for reading my story and for your comment!
When I asked a teacher in creative writing, he told me that for readers to be interested, we need to make a difference between portrayal and description—that is, if you have a message in your story, it shouldn’t be too obvious, or the reader will feel like they can’t think for themselves. I guess there is a scale, for if too subtle, then the message will not get across at all, perhaps shadowed by other interpretations.
I think your suggestions may help me bring the story closer to the optimal point on this scale, for I believe I am being too subtle.
Dear Greg—thank you for reading my story and for your comment!
When I asked a teacher in creative writing, he told me that for readers to be interested, we need to make a difference between portrayal and description—that is, if you have a message in your story, it shouldn’t be too obvious, or the reader will feel like they can’t think for themselves. I guess there is a scale, for if too subtle, then the message will not get across at all, perhaps shadowed by other interpretations.
I think your suggestions may help me bring the story closer to the optimal point on this scale, for I believe I am being too subtle.