I imagine this summary not being super helpful to people.
More specifically:
I think the executive summary is fine
The first sentences of each of Key points 1, 2, and 3 are all sort of pointing to the same point
If they were combined in one key point that would probably work
Unfortunately the second sentence in each case is making a different point, so the flow could be a bit confusing
The second sentence of Key point 2 doesn’t feel very key
Key point 4 is pretty good
Key point 5 kind of feels like nonsense (like if I squint I can see what it’s saying, but I don’t expect it to be helpful for any readers of the summary)
Key point 6 is not inaccurate, but I wouldn’t have guessed it was very key
Of course it’s possible I’m too close to the source material to judge well! Do as you will with the feedback :)
I imagine this summary not being super helpful to people.
More specifically:
I think the executive summary is fine
The first sentences of each of Key points 1, 2, and 3 are all sort of pointing to the same point
If they were combined in one key point that would probably work
Unfortunately the second sentence in each case is making a different point, so the flow could be a bit confusing
The second sentence of Key point 2 doesn’t feel very key
Key point 4 is pretty good
Key point 5 kind of feels like nonsense (like if I squint I can see what it’s saying, but I don’t expect it to be helpful for any readers of the summary)
Key point 6 is not inaccurate, but I wouldn’t have guessed it was very key
Of course it’s possible I’m too close to the source material to judge well! Do as you will with the feedback :)