I am a writer (though not a published one) and I second his judgement. I felt brief disquiet at the line he commented on, but didn’t analyze it until I read his post because the story as a whole had still worked very well for me. I think the change makes a good story better, and I thank both Steve for suggesting it and Joshua for implementing it.
I am a writer (though not a published one) and I second his judgement. I felt brief disquiet at the line he commented on, but didn’t analyze it until I read his post because the story as a whole had still worked very well for me. I think the change makes a good story better, and I thank both Steve for suggesting it and Joshua for implementing it.