Fantastic comments, thank you! I included the bit about personal fulfillment because it’s such an important component of being able to sustain an effective career long term, but in retrospect I was so focused on including as many EA ideas as I could that I didn’t notice how out of place that sentiment is at that point in the story. I removed both that sentence and the one about more important causes, and I added a variant of your suggested replacement sentence.
I am a writer (though not a published one) and I second his judgement. I felt brief disquiet at the line he commented on, but didn’t analyze it until I read his post because the story as a whole had still worked very well for me. I think the change makes a good story better, and I thank both Steve for suggesting it and Joshua for implementing it.
Fantastic comments, thank you! I included the bit about personal fulfillment because it’s such an important component of being able to sustain an effective career long term, but in retrospect I was so focused on including as many EA ideas as I could that I didn’t notice how out of place that sentiment is at that point in the story. I removed both that sentence and the one about more important causes, and I added a variant of your suggested replacement sentence.
I am a writer (though not a published one) and I second his judgement. I felt brief disquiet at the line he commented on, but didn’t analyze it until I read his post because the story as a whole had still worked very well for me. I think the change makes a good story better, and I thank both Steve for suggesting it and Joshua for implementing it.