I thought this was interesting and well written. Thanks for posting it, and thanks especially for writing it in a way which (at least in my view) was balanced and fair.
I’m unsure about whether the specific example you used was a wise choice. I see the merits to making this abstract enough that it doesn’t feel like an attack on people with some particular set of political views (and I think you succeeded on this front), however I found some parts a little hard to follow, and found myself struggling to remember and then having to check whether people were pro-porridge or not. I don’t know whether it would have been possible to use a more “realistic” example without compromosing the neutrality I praised at the start however, so maybe this was best.
On the example; I wrote this fairly quickly. I think the example is quite mediocre and the writing of the whole piece was fairly rough. If I were to give myself a grade on writing quality for simplicity or understandability, it would be a C or so. (This is about what I was aiming for given the investment).
I’d be interested in seeing further writing that uses more intuitive and true examples.
I thought this was interesting and well written. Thanks for posting it, and thanks especially for writing it in a way which (at least in my view) was balanced and fair.
I’m unsure about whether the specific example you used was a wise choice. I see the merits to making this abstract enough that it doesn’t feel like an attack on people with some particular set of political views (and I think you succeeded on this front), however I found some parts a little hard to follow, and found myself struggling to remember and then having to check whether people were pro-porridge or not. I don’t know whether it would have been possible to use a more “realistic” example without compromosing the neutrality I praised at the start however, so maybe this was best.
Thanks so much for the feedback.
On the example; I wrote this fairly quickly. I think the example is quite mediocre and the writing of the whole piece was fairly rough. If I were to give myself a grade on writing quality for simplicity or understandability, it would be a C or so. (This is about what I was aiming for given the investment).
I’d be interested in seeing further writing that uses more intuitive and true examples.