Thank you for spending the time writing such detailed feedback Lumpyproletariat!This is the first ever blog-style post I’d written (and first contribution to the EA Forum), so it’s incredibly helpful that you’ve pointed out specific examples and provided alternatives—it’s helped me to see exactly what I can adjust in future. I can see for example how much more digestible the ‘Table of Contents’ is the way that you’ve drafted it (and how much more cognitive load it requires to read the ’In seeking to answer these questions [...] part as it is currently). Appreciate it a lot!
Thank you for spending the time writing such detailed feedback Lumpyproletariat! This is the first ever blog-style post I’d written (and first contribution to the EA Forum), so it’s incredibly helpful that you’ve pointed out specific examples and provided alternatives—it’s helped me to see exactly what I can adjust in future. I can see for example how much more digestible the ‘Table of Contents’ is the way that you’ve drafted it (and how much more cognitive load it requires to read the ’In seeking to answer these questions [...] part as it is currently). Appreciate it a lot!
I’m very glad to have been of help. :D